The Solitary Daisy – Issue 6

Stone Fruit

first peach-
entering the silence
of the moment
-Sally Quon

in a fragrant cloud
warm sun on froth of blossom
cherries soon
-Jaki Sawyer

picking raspberries-
tiny stones caught
between my teeth
            -Michele Rule
(Raspberries are clusters of tiny stone fruit also known as drupes.)

Member News

Sally Quon is pleased to share that one of her haiku has been chosen by the Haiku Foundation as part of their Haiku-A-Day project for July. Sally’s haiku will appear on their website on July 16.

Tips on What Not to Do in Haiku – By Larry Gross

Here are 10 devices that can “turn off” experienced editors, judges & haikuists. You might want to avoid them or use them carefully:

  • A Title – Most haiku are untitled; a successful haiku usually speaks for itself. Instead of using a title, try revision.
  • Too Much Punctuation – Avoid periods. A haiku is one moment in a continuum; a period often destroys that illusion (so may beginning with a capital letter). Other punctuation—The average haiku has one break in thought or continuity, usually at the end of line 1 or 2 (sometimes, the middle of line 2). If punctuated at all, it is usually with a colon, dash or ellipsis. An occasional dash or ellipsis may provide emphasis either before of after the final word (or phrase). In general, shy away from punctuation unless you are sure of its benefit.
  • The Telegram Effect – Compress your haiku but be sure the omission of words (especially the articles a, an & the) doesn’t chop it into ungainly pieces.
  • Lifeless Verbs – The is & have families result in pictureless & actionless verses. Use action verbs instead.
  • Past or Future Tense – Haiku usually happen now. Past & future tenses remove us from the action & often use more words—weak ones like has, have, will.
  • Adjectives and Adverbs – Use sparingly. Look for ones made from noun or verb roots. Avoid very, much, any, many, few, & all-inclusive words like every, all, always, never, everyone .
  • “I”: Overuse of 1st person pronouns – It’s more risky in haiku than in senryu. Put emphasis on the image, not the person.
  • Padding – Don’t throw in words just to conform to a 5-7-5 or other imagined pattern. Either revise to find 17 strong, useful syllables or go for a shorter verse.
  • Redundancy – One season word is enough: “Spring blossoms” is redundant: both identify season. Let strong words do their job: “pavement wet with rain” is redundant.
  • Abstractions Not Supported by Concrete Imagery – Let imagery suggest the point; don’t state it baldly. Proverbs masquerading as haiku are likely to run into trouble.

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This Week’s Prompt

Borrowed from The Tricycle Monthly Haiku Challenge, use the word barefoot in a haiku.

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.”

W. B. Yeats
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